My revisions:
Several of my reviewers had trouble following the story I was trying to convey, so I had to add a bit more text to be sure the ideas were clear. Some of the images work better than others, but in many cases I don't know what might have worked better. Most of the meanings are metaphorical and aren't always as clear to the viewer as they are to me. I added several more pictures and also rearranged things so that the form of the pictures follows on of the main themes. After the discussions
Responses:
Justin Taylor
Most of your pictures tied in well and I think they told the story you sought to tell, but a few of them could have been tied in a bit better, for example I’m not sure the picture of the hamburger was necessary, an I was unsure of the connection with the family picture near the end. I also liked the way you arranged the presentation on the canvas.
Nicole Wang
I found that the connections between the text, the argument, and the pictures you used were a bit loose. I feel it might have been more effective to pair them more firmly. Also, much of the information you told us verbally should have been better represented within the prezi. That said you explored a very deep topic.
Brandon Tarby
Your story is very clear, your images tie well to the story and the text you used. One thing that I might suggest is changing the color of the text to represent the changing attitude of the boy, red while he’s focused on running, but then perhaps blue or orange as he’s homeless and lost, on to green as he returns home using the symbolism of the colors.
Amanda Charles
I liked your topic but I feel you could tighten the narrative as presented in the prezi, perhaps by presenting your harmful readymades first then explicating them, and using a bit more text and making the difference between your text and the text of the ads. Also, a few of your images are a bit repetitious, like the two of people drinking coffee from the pot.
Rachael Ward
I enjoyed the story, though I don’t have and background with Mass Effect. The pictures however, because of their darkness and small size they seemed to take a back seat to the text that stood out much more visually. The emphasis on certain words by color was a good idea, though one or two were hard to read on the background.
Jason Frey
The argument is clear and each image serves its purpose, though I think the orange background distracts a bit from the images that are in color. The arrangement of the images is logical and effective, though I’m not sure that there are not any ways to better emphasize the images and their connections.
Jessica Allebach
This is much improved from what it was before, the new images and texts really tie things together. The links between the images are much clearer and the presentation as a whole is very strong. The ruinous images for the most part are much more jarring, though as you mentioned one or two could be better related to your audience.
Several of my reviewers had trouble following the story I was trying to convey, so I had to add a bit more text to be sure the ideas were clear. Some of the images work better than others, but in many cases I don't know what might have worked better. Most of the meanings are metaphorical and aren't always as clear to the viewer as they are to me. I added several more pictures and also rearranged things so that the form of the pictures follows on of the main themes. After the discussions
Responses:
Justin Taylor
Most of your pictures tied in well and I think they told the story you sought to tell, but a few of them could have been tied in a bit better, for example I’m not sure the picture of the hamburger was necessary, an I was unsure of the connection with the family picture near the end. I also liked the way you arranged the presentation on the canvas.
Nicole Wang
I found that the connections between the text, the argument, and the pictures you used were a bit loose. I feel it might have been more effective to pair them more firmly. Also, much of the information you told us verbally should have been better represented within the prezi. That said you explored a very deep topic.
Brandon Tarby
Your story is very clear, your images tie well to the story and the text you used. One thing that I might suggest is changing the color of the text to represent the changing attitude of the boy, red while he’s focused on running, but then perhaps blue or orange as he’s homeless and lost, on to green as he returns home using the symbolism of the colors.
Amanda Charles
I liked your topic but I feel you could tighten the narrative as presented in the prezi, perhaps by presenting your harmful readymades first then explicating them, and using a bit more text and making the difference between your text and the text of the ads. Also, a few of your images are a bit repetitious, like the two of people drinking coffee from the pot.
Rachael Ward
I enjoyed the story, though I don’t have and background with Mass Effect. The pictures however, because of their darkness and small size they seemed to take a back seat to the text that stood out much more visually. The emphasis on certain words by color was a good idea, though one or two were hard to read on the background.
Jason Frey
The argument is clear and each image serves its purpose, though I think the orange background distracts a bit from the images that are in color. The arrangement of the images is logical and effective, though I’m not sure that there are not any ways to better emphasize the images and their connections.
Jessica Allebach
This is much improved from what it was before, the new images and texts really tie things together. The links between the images are much clearer and the presentation as a whole is very strong. The ruinous images for the most part are much more jarring, though as you mentioned one or two could be better related to your audience.